Thursday, June 14, 2012

Inspiration from Medicine

I went for some inspiration to Lillie McFerrin's Five Sentence Fiction. The prompt word is "Medicine." I am using characters and a bit of plot from my work in progress, The Magicless. (to read more about it, go here.)

"He's really hurt and I don't know if we can get him to a clinic in time," Sandrine said, her eyes drilling through Guillaume. "I know which of the five he needs," she muttered, drawing Pierre's head higher up on her lap as he wheezed.

"Personal use of magic is forbidden, in all cases, for all reasons," Guillaume reminded her, then nodded his head.

Sandrine ruffled Pierre's feathery hair as she whispered, "You are being so brave, and I love you so much."

Red flames of magic flickered along Pierre's arm, disappearing into his chest, while the white sparks dancing across Sandrine reflected in his dark laughing eyes. 

19 comments:

  1. Very interesting - mysterious and magical... nice one!

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    1. Thanks! Maybe laughter isn't the best medicine...

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  2. Yes, the element of magic is compelling in this one. I see you're in France...I spent a few years there (Brittany and Lonsle-Saulnier), so long ago now. A wonderful experience.

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    1. I haven't been to Bretagne yet, but it's on the list! I am in Dordogne, in the southwest, between Bordeaux and PĂ©rigueux.

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  3. An interesting piece. Nicely done :)

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  4. I like the line about the white sparks dancing and reflecting. I'd like to read more. . .are your fsf post going to contribute to the same story line? I think the dialogue flows well.

    I have a friend who used to spend her summers in the country in France. Her grandparents were immigrants to the U.S. I would love to go there and stay in the country. She told me I probably wouldn't want to come back.

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    1. I hadn't thought about having a continuing story-line - I'll think about that! As for France, she's like a sister; you love her to pieces and hate her guts. Benjamin Franklin said, "Each man has two countries, I think: His own, and France." I hope you make that dream happen and decide for yourself ;)

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  5. An enticing extract; very interesting and nicely done.

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  6. Well done! I really enjoyed the story and also the beautiful flow of your sentence structure. My my!

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    1. This is a good exercise for me - thanks!

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  7. Your work in progress sounds amazing if this extract is anything to go by. I loved the visual you created with the last sentence. xx

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    1. The manuscript is with a couple beta readers right now - I hope we can fill in the holes and whip it into shape!

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  8. Wish we could summon inner magic to heal all wounds and chronic illnesses. Maybe one day...at least we can dream. I loved "ruffled his feathery hair..." Nice work. I didn't enter this week bec. life interfered with art. See you next week.

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    1. I'm a big believer in healing powers of whole foods, rest, exercise, stress-relief, love, prayer, homeopathics, herbs, and then hospitals and doctors! Hope life goes well this week, with new mercies for every morning.

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  9. I love a story with a bit of magic! The vivid details are painted perfectly! Nice work!

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  10. Very interesting -- and I'm left wondering why the personal use of magic is forbidden. Is it a Harry Potter type situation, where these characters are young, or are they something of an oppressed minority? Nice descriptions and flow to this piece.

    Brian

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    1. Actually, this would fit in more at the end of the book. At the beginning, it's the magicless who are the minority! Hopefully that just makes you more curious ;) Thanks for stopping in.

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