Friday, May 25, 2012

Inspiration from Lillian McFerrin

This is Saturday's post, but I'm gone for the weekend and posting it early. I saw something neat the other day and I was inspired to write a little story. Lillian McFerrin hosts Five Sentence Fiction on Wednesdays. The prompt for this week is SILENCE.

She waited for it in the morning, while the children giggled and yelled. She listened for it in the afternoon, while the neighbor cussed and scooters buzzed. She hated it in the evening, when the emptiness weighed and she waited. She loved it in the night, when the darkness envelopped and his warmth embraced. Yes, she loved and hated the silence.



 

17 comments:

  1. Ah, the bittersweet moments in time, when silence becomes a friend or foe!
    I love the tone of your piece!

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  2. I love the movement through the day, and as michelle said above, the moments when we love and hate the silence.

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  3. Definitely been there! Lovely piece of writing.

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  4. Oh, this is so lovely - the progression of the day, the sounds contrasted with the silence. Wonderful! :)

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  5. Ah, a beautiful description of the tyranny of silence!

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  6. Silence is golden, but only if you want it. It can be deafening, scary, or peaceful. It all depends on where your inner mood is on the scale of contentment.

    Nice short piece. Thanks for sharing. Now following, and appreciate you visiting my blog. Say hi next time!

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    1. Nice to meet you - looking forward to reading more on your blog too.

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  7. Nice, and so true! Much enjoyed, thank you :)

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  8. Thanks for reading and commenting! This was lots of fun - I'll have to do it again.

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  9. There is a poetic feel to this post. I liked it a lot. Have you thought of turning it into a poem?

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    1. I'm not really sure where to start with poetry. Can you recommend any goo books on the craft?

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  10. I'm with you. It's a love-hate relationship with silence. I long for it when the landscapers descend upon our neighborhood with their mowers and blowers, but the silent treatment from a loved one is nearly unbearable... nice job!

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    1. I tend to be that way; I hate France...no, no, no, I LOVE her! It's a sweet and sour life.

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  11. Perfect progression of the day...we all have felt it. Nicely done!

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  12. simple yet thoughtful, nice flow

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    1. I wrote this during the morning kid-noise phase, so I'm glad it turned out ok . Thanks for commenting!

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